Voted For: Still Motion
i liked your style....
Several demons sip semen between mattress and sheets
Others watch virgins bleeding, blood to brush their teeth
7/10...i guess this was a pretty nice opening
Visages covered by human faces and back massages
Voluptuous breast, trick your thoughts like mirages
6/10...wasnt quite feelin the punch
With curved gypsy hips and your eyes flirt
Peeling of clothes to reveal barren caramel desert
7/10....good punch...needs a bit of elevation
Your thirsty for the vaginal fluid, dripping into dry tongues
Breath shortens as sweet words escape your spry lungs
8/10...Very Good Punch there
Finger foreplay decays into an oral foray…
As you the hunter salivates at slow prey…
7/10...it was a good punch but again needs a bit of elevation
Drip… Drip… The rift below explodes into electricity
Short-circuiting sexual desires of tainting virginity
8/10...pretty tight bar
The smoke clears, between arm lies a metallic treat
As the robotic demon force feeds you steel sheets
Pretty D0pe closing 9/10
U had a very nice opning as well as the closing but some punches i wasnt fellin....ur vocab work was put in with a lot of effort and bars were nicely dropped...
OVERALL VOTE: Still Motion
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