Sixth Sense:


Decent verse, i think you could have wrote it a little better. Your imagery was ok but you should work on that a bit more. Be more descriptive in some areas. Your vocabulary was great though and that made up for some the abscence of imagery. The story was a little foggy in my eyes, it really didnt point out much about consequences and i understand you broke the word down to use it better but i think you could have wrote something more entertaining.

Overall: 6.4/10

E.C. :

You also had a decent verse, i liked the plot of the story and the idea behind it, but that idea has been used a million times. Be more creative with the storyline next time, use a different set up or a different ending for your story. The whole "doing something illegal and dying" bit is played out but you were still original in your story. Decent vocabulary, imagery was on point, and your verse flowed off the tongue pretty well. I think you took this battle but you could have been more creative.

Overall: 7.1/10


Vote: E.C

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