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Old 07-29-05, 06:30 PM   #16
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Voted For: flow verse

u had a more complex verse but ur third bar dun rhyme.. ur verse was more creativeand hard hitting, you should get outta that newb structure tho.. where you put a space between each line.. and try not to stretch your bars.. good luck to both, but this was one-sided..

v/flow verse
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