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lol.......ending made me laugh.
ok,
structure was def the best part of this piece, made everything flow nice and smooth, vocab could have been better but it suited the piece's read. flow was solid and on point throughout, imagery picked up more and more as the piece went along and the emotion was meh, iffy.
overall though i really liked the way this flowed consistently throughout and the story was pretty good too with a nice ending. keep it up slim
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Originally Posted by MADDRAPPER
cats call me whack but can't come with tall fact its all an act to cover the truth, i got a trademark but you afraid of the dark pussy, not a hood survivor just wood fibers to be popped and chopped by an ax you not hot on wax likke famous rappers
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