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Old 08-01-05, 12:44 PM   #11
mizz fyre
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this was a good piece....i actually liked the hook and i felt that in those four lines you managed to display a lot of emotion....you came deep with this and i could tell that you wrote it from the heart.......one thing i will say though is that you need to work on your rhyming because some words didn't rhyme as well as they could have.....also need to work on your flow 7/10
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