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Old 08-01-05, 09:45 PM   #24
taz
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i really liked this man good stuff 8/10 good vocab good structure ok flow......nothing really to complain about.....but one thing you must remind urself about......keep the reader awake this bored me a bit....not too much........but it was a factor.....no hate just lookin out.......keep progressin.....return the favor
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