I like this. Decent Flow. Nice imagery. Good Approach and Nice concept. I wish you could've went longer though but your piece was so complex and well written. Upp on the vocab much more. Put More Multi'z in it. The best aspect in this piece was the "Imagery" and the Emotion was good, it seems the imagery took over this piece. Well done.
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