Meh...Nothing Special here. Put more vocab in it...Plus your flow is whack, put some Multi'z. Emotion lacked too. The Imagery was the best aspect in your verse. Like High Class said you tried so hard to fit one thing all In..In one Line which is not good. Dont stretch your Lines that Much, if you are Must have a decent Flow and Multi'z. Plus the concept is soooo Played out, next time Come out of that shell and go off on the Topic just not Focus on One word "Dream"...Ok Approach Though.

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