word, i'll leave feed now:

troop; nice flow man, i enjoyed the easyness of the read, and i thought you came really strong emotionally here, and took a hold of the piece and brought it out more, well done. but i feel there were some parts i didn't like, like using the word 'orgasmic' in a serious, emotional pice.....it doesn't really fit, and the stiffler's mom line was kinda outta place too, but overall, good drop man, keep up.

black queen; very strong emotionally, liked it, vocab could be elevated, but thats minor, you know how to write, and you should keep up, because you do a good job. just work on imagery a little more, but since this was centered around love and hate, its obvioulsy an emotion piece, so thats minor as well, but keep up.

well done to both, and make sure you check out my new OM coming soon

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