da,m I liked this a lot. I think it would be better in an audio version though cuz it was a lil hard to imagine the beat. Also I dont think u really stuck to the topic that was in the real song but u did write this very good. I cant wait to hear an audio version if there will be one. I think overall its a 8/10 cuz it needs to be an audio lol, and it was maybe a lil off topic. Props to u guys on this excellent piece keep writing. And leave some feedback on my Om's please. And if possible my topical battle.

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