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GG Haterz
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I liked this piece, your take on a killer was nice, but your similies were becoming kinda tedious. One or two is fine, but I don't like everything being a metaphor or similie. Be straight up sometimes. The imagery was nice and so was the emotion. Overall, this piece was definately worth the read, but try re wording your hook.
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Originally Posted by Twisted Visions
50 nickle=less than 50 cent, go back to school you idiot
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