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Old 08-05-05, 12:55 PM   #41
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Voted For: Chameleon

My words are chock full of scorching letters Method you think YOU'RE better??...
I'm STILL the King round this bitch and you're one of the Court Jesters...
^^OK punch....better flow...
Who the fuck said you were dope?? It's a vicious rumor...
Try and shoot me i dodge bullets like Wyatt Earp with six shooters...
^^No punch.....but dope multi
I'm forever-great finished in a flurry words typed quick-in-a-hurry this is checkmate...
This is what happens when a legend faces a bum who's less than second rate...
^^FLow was good...but punch lacked..
U wanna discuss posts. ho, urs are jokes writings worthless as if ur mind capacity was zero...
Ur mouths shape like an O cause u sip bottle tops n poke holes thru guys like cheerios...
^^LMAO....DOPE...creative..hard hittin...multi...10/10
I'ma call u whistle the way u blowoff MC's ur skills are pitiful n simple...
U bit the big pickle, ur best efforts are compared to nursery rhyme riddles...
^^internal seemed forced
Psssh.. and to think this wasn't even close to the best I could write...
It's bed time kid I just put you to sleep for the rest of ur life
^^NO punch

Seems to me you basing it all on multis and flow.And your not concentrating on punches.Your best line was the cherrios one....but aside from it...there wasn't much eye-opening one.You had flow...but not punches.WOrdplay and metas.

you aint street now go back to the burbs
they call him chameleon cause he blends in w/ tha herbs
^^basic and whack.....
you can pray to god that you hope to win
shit you fallin off more than baggy jeans on an eithopian
^^Flow bad ans punch sucked
i've never heard of you kid, so get off of my cock
so when i say nobodys perefect im really givin you props
^^Hmm....OK....5/10
he aint drop knowledge, im jus makin him my son
i should change my name to 0 the way he's next to none
^^HM....Ok again...6/10
you schemin to win, theres no way man
dats walkin on thin ice an ima help you fall through w/ya plans
^^No....
id prank call this bitch but cell phone sucks
but ima get you on the horn...of a fuckin elephant tusk
^^NO...

Only 2 good punches that I've seen.You were just a lil newbish with some of the punches.Like the Chameleon/herbs...basic as fuck.Use wordplay and metas...and stop with the basic rhyme sheme.Use multis.

Vote-Chameleon
RTF
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