Voted For: Defined

recross to the mosh im untouchable like randy 'moss'
........rewind this verse so ull eazily get to ur 100th 'loss'
^^^NO punch
be ready to forfiet ur prize undisputed rhymes disguise my 'size'
........realize ur 'deadwieght' like a turtle turtle in 'Master of Disguise'*
^^wat does turle turtle have to do with deadwieght?
prepare for this to be ur final battle beware 'flow verse'
........u couldnt spit 'Loud' and 'Clear' if u were a 'Crow Sperse'**
^^simplitic
distorted to rubble destroy u like a 'Finger' to a 'Bubble'
........commense to a pray cuz uve been retorted to a 'Struggle'
^^too simplistic

You verse had structure.FLow was OK.But punches sucked.Some made no sense.Like that turtle turle line...wat does that have to do with deadwieght?Seems like you just put it there for the hell of it.And you were far to simplistic.

Like a football linebacker no matter how much he works out he can’t be defined
So don’t worry about elevation this win is already mine
^^No punch...set-up was good...but it set-up nothing
He thinks he’s funny? . . . yea like jokers in a deck of cards . . .just throw them out
He can’t spit unless you mean the cum dripping out his mouth
^^^PLAyed to death......
Bitch has to “recycle” his lines. . . cause the ‘trash pickers” don’t want his “garbage”
Lacks creativity cause he gives his head but receives no knowledge
^^simple
To him “Pun” was just a rapper . . . which explains why he doesn’t get “wordplay”
Bitch couldn’t drop decent “bar” if he spit from “Pelican Bay”
^^PLAYed....

Better flow and structure.But punches lacked even more.Every one of your lines were either played or str8 whack.It's all about wordplay and metas.you can't just state bullshit.

ANd both of you...where are the personals and multis?

Vote-Defined(rtf)

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203166

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