Okay, lemme break this down for yah...

It was just a freestyle so I ain't really gonna comment on emotion, imagery or concept ya kno.

The structure can get fixed which will make your drop easier to read, for instance: do not have lines of 5 wordse one time and then lines of 20 words or so. It makes your structure look choppy you know so fix that up a little, make sure your lines are around the same length, center the whole thing maybe.

The vocab is pretty cool, might be upped here and there you know.

Flow is good, had a lot of multies, internal rhyming, some lines are a bit stretched for instance:

now hes up afraid and betrayed cuz he heard these lyrics and stayed away from the savior.
^ make it a little shorter ya kno...

Overall solid freestyle, fix your structure, try to stay focused on one concept or topic next time because you switched it up a lot you know.

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