Alright, i also though that High Class took this just to get it out early where my vote goes.

Troop - As drama said, you had great imagery and that was also the best part that stuck out to me, just by reading the first couple lines of your verse i already has guessed how it was going to turn out and i was correct, it was very predictable.. And yes, you lacked a tad in the emotion department, but the imagery still.. best ive seen in a while good job with that. Just lacked i think.

High Class - You had a very good choice of rhyme scheme and just the words that you used to rhyme with the last, seemed very well thought out, not just the first thing that popped into your mind type crap, it seems like you really thought this one out well and hey, it worked.. you did a really good job with that and i thought the concept was golden.. good job.

v. High Class.

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