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Old 08-06-05, 10:59 AM   #16
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Souljah:

I wasnt feeling your verse that much. You had a creative approach to the topic, but i felt like the ideas behind your words were repetitive. It seemed like a circle of events. You should have done your timeline a bit better. Your imagery was ok in a couple places but otherwise it was nonexistant. Ok emotion, could have been better.

Overall: 4.1/10


King Solo:

You had a pretty good verse. And i felt your first 8 lines were better than soljahs whole verse. But i also feel after those first 8 lines you fell off the topic a bit. Your emotion and vocabulary were great, imagery could have been better. Good approach at the topic, and you were creative. Nice piece.

Overall: 7.8/10


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