damn i love the topic.

the flow was good i like how you shortened the lines for me, the wording is a little off but now that you told me english is a 2nd language its cool i guess, the stucture was really good imagery is very good as well one of ya best stages but i've seen you do some better stories, emotion was good but you need to show it more use more "," ya know anyway good piece really feelin it.

rtf in Lost Memories links in thy sig

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