Voted For: blackfrostbite

yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/
'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/
^^OK....liked 1st line more....4/10
haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/
i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/
^^No punch.....2/10
yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/
cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/
^^No punch.....1/10
ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/
in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/
^^woulda been better if ya didn't rhmye the same words...3/10
dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/
how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/
^^Best Bar here.....6/10

OK...ight verse here.Had some lines in the middle that didn't hit...it was you lip-smacking.That last bar may have won it for you though.Overall...a good verse...5/10

You've got the wrong kind of RIME/Rhyme
and now you're Frozen in time,
^^what the hell?..the frozen shit coulda been better..2/10
but that heat that VISION speaks
will defrost you're behind.
^^No punch....1/10
You stumbled across a lyrical boss mr.frost,
or should i say frosty u softy, take a loss.
^^No punch...stop talkin shit and diss....1/10
This wanna b stepped in front of me,
now it's slushies on the house.
he ain't talkin no more.
I put a lid on his mouth.
^^NO.....2/10

Ok...poor structure and poor flow.Here wat...get some wordplay and metas.You were too basic.That 1st bar woulda been hot if you had some better wording.Try making your line longer too.

Vote-BlackFrostBite
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203256
With this sick,twisted,verbalistic rhyming device.
think twice, i'm precise
and you're slippin on ice.