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Old 08-08-05, 03:08 AM   #33
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Voted For: flow verse

the wordplay was simple but very hard hitting .......... i enjoyed your verses thought they were really funny....... structure needs work tho .................like the personal in the opener ...........Defined had a good drop too ................ but my vote goes to flow..... nice drop man ......good luck to both..keep writing
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FIX ur LENSES and get with FOCUS