Voted For: CataclyzM-i-C
when it comes to gun fire, ill let ammo fly threw ya/
cus i rip problem children, even that white kid junior
^^no punch in here....0/10
ill hit u in the hip with the guage n let ya whole thigh dangle/
do it like the motion picture..son..i'll use ya bow tie to strangle
^^no punch..you need to start dissin...0/10
you got about as many wins as the cincinatti bangels/
lil nigga dont wanna tangle he knos ill leave his body mangled
^^stop talking about yourself...diss....0/10
if u da problem then u can call me A.I./
this kid needs a str8 eye cuz he raps like a fuckin gay guy
^^too basic...just stating he gay?.....1/10
u aint the real problem so stop hatin on cass/
the hustler wins this battle so get ur tung out his ass
^^how is he hatin on cass wiht that name?....2/10
im from mass, where da hood burns our trash/
u'll ignite asap cuz ur barz is str8 gas
^^no......too basic....2/10
u cud never b me, my barz are 2 fuckin wild/
im sonnin dis child so he mite bite daddys style
^^basic....2/10
Far too basic here.At the starting of the verse...you were bassically talking about yourself.1st bar-you rip children.....2nd bar-you'll bow tie something....3rd bar-leave his body starngled...and when you finnaly did start dissing...you were too basic.You gotta have complexity
im gonna~MURDA~u ya~COWARD~cuz im wanna those
crazy niggaz that rep~BROWARD~//
^^OK...we don't care about what yo rep...0/10
listen CataclyzM-I-C
u bout 2 get rip see sumthing~SLICK~ill bus yo~shit~//
^^no punch....0/10
Dawg u tryin 2 battle me ur really~FUNNY~u look like a fuckin fruity~bunnyz~//
^^basic as fuck.....1/10
cuz im gonna be tha champ so.. u gone~WORSHIP~ME~//
cuz i aint a pussy bitch like u
wit da~HIV~//
^^basic....1/10
like a boss i got yo mamma~on~LOCK~
try fuck wit me i spray ya wit da~GLOCK~//
^^NO punch...1/10
so im jus
gonna end it~RIGHT~HERE~NOW~so ill see u later in tha~STREETS~U FUCKIN~CLOWN~//
^^NO punch...0/10
Ok...first off...structure..fix it.zYou got it all bunched up together in a paragraph.And stop with the "//" and "~".They just make your verse look more newbish.You were self glorifing and being basic worse than the other guy.1st bar-U reppin broward....2nd.-you'll bust on his shit....4th-you the champ and should be worshipped...and a lot more.And the lines that actually dissed were far too basic.
Vote-Cata M-I-C
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^^c'mon.,....don't be a bitch just cause I voted against you..i left feeback for you both...