haha nice concept like how u did the abc's lol......up on ur sctructure i really couldnt get a good flow goin homey...ur vocab was extrememly basic, only big word wwas like dalmation......up on multis so it will flow better.....try and get all the words to end at the same spot at the end of each line.....and as u go along in ur rhyme try and enhance the vocab so its more enjoyable to read......keep uppin keep postin and doin ur thing....RTF on my sig links......peace