my worst topical is better than this, sadly.
your choice of words to describe the situation sucked, you have VERY fasle emotion

"I hear the wails once again, it's like a death bell. So loud
and scary. Wishing right now that god angles can shroud
me. I lost God Trust when I acted upon as a grim reaper
Again I saw it's familiar face. Putting my hands up to voider
away. Then I moved back, then it dramatically disappeared forever "

Dont do this.
the cut off a sentence
then finish it on the next line just to make it rhyme.
that is sooo wack, and it shows how inexperienced you are.
you suck at writing, but you have SLIGHT VERY SLIGHT potential, I advise you to work on your peices a little more than 30 minutes before you post them.
especially dont right it just to rhyme it, ATLEAST make it flow, because like so many other people fail to forget, is that this is STILL A RAP SITE!!
Rap, dont write shit that just happen to rhyme.
the topic is played btw

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