beat is really played man sick of hearin it lol.... ur emotion is ok ur adlibs are off... u need to fix your quality and mix better.... flow is abit off and structure is also very basic.... lyrics are ok.... delivery isnt all dat cos ur emotion isnt too great it jus sounds like ur readin... u need a new mic cos it sounds fucked mate... 2nd flows better dan first.. emotion is a lil better still sounds like ur just readin n jus sayin wat u wanna say jus 4 da sake of sayin it.... yea advice id vgive u is... practice ur lyrics untill u know off top... den record fix ur structure... make it more consistent yet make more enjoyable switchin up ur rhyme scheme and flow every now n then and spit ur lyrics like u mean em... safe