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Bangs like bikini attol
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IP:
Read a bit of the first verse... Wasnt really feelin it.. The way your writing is real undeveloped and simple.. Your girl would love it.. But I cant imagine that stuff making a dope track that would really impress people over the level that every other wannabe rapper in the states or on the internet does..
Try and put a bit of character in it and work on your wording and style..... And up your rhyme scheme a bit.. Atleast try and have 3 or 4 syllables rhyming at the end of each line..
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