Voted For: Reflekt

you standing in my way..the only thing thats tryna hinder
me..so when im done my lyrics leave .da illest injer(injured)
^^weak wordplay here...5/10
your 10 posts that you did is the closest you'll ever come to being perfect
cause dudes punches are slow to connect like dial-up service
^^Played as fuck....2/10
gettin pm's from u sayin check in..ho gimme a second
wanna test this?..but you only fire blanks like ya record*
^^Ok.......a lil uoriginal rip on record tho...5/10
man you nothing to me..you might got 50 cents..but thats only a lil bit
the only things to come outta jersey are big headed lil kidd's**
^^1st line was good,2nd sucked...4/10
im like a mc doctor if ya peep the way my lyrics tear through your anatomy
your verse is nothing but littered with more filler than a mouth infested with cavities
^^Basic.....3/10
now when da illest jumps off stage is the only time they ever turn you up
why bother with new jersey?..when miami already burned you up***
^^ok....4/10

Ight...mediocre verse here...shows you can use some elevation.I saw you make some attempts on wordplay with the 1st bar/injer....but it wasn't executed well.Had too many played lines..like the dial up one and cavities.Then there are the flat out basic lines like the record one.So just work on creativity,complexity,and wordplay.But at least all of your bars had punches.

Loud mouth muffucker im here to stop these lames,
if u a gangsta muffucker im bout to check u like a hockey game
^^Not much of a punch tho...0/10
Its no love bitch yea im disrespectin ya ass,
u prolly had a shitty child hood i cud tell cuz ur rymes r REFLEKTIN ur past.
^^hmm...Ok..a personal at least...a generous 4/10
This kids a young buck, let alone a dumb fuck,
and u garbage muffucker soo u get taken out in a dump truck
^^basic as fuck....1/10
If the call gets made to take u out im tha shooter,
cuz my gunz constantly got hands on'em like tha mouse on a computer
^^Not much of a punch..good concept with hands/mouse...but you talking about your guns..as opposed to dissing...1/10
When we fight bitch dont worry bout wut im holdin on me,
i guess battlin new jacks gets this kid feelin good like he rollin on E
^Flowed bad.....weak punch...3/10
wen we done his eyes el b to swollen to see,
he wants to b a rapper but a bitch is wut hes goin to be.
^^basic as fuck

Ok...bad verse man.Too basic.Every line,except the mouse one was basic.As for the mouse line..you coulda said his mother's ass always got hands on it like a mouse or something.You gotta make it diss.You can't go talkin about your guns and shit.And get complex with your rhymes.

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