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Still Spectacular, Yes!
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IP:
Hmm..its hard to judge a type emotional piece..so i'll drop suggestions and give constructive criticism...
First off may i suggest you change your structure. It becomes an "eyesore" after a while. i suggest a layered pattern..the one you normally see like
"bla bla bla bla bla"
bla bla bla bla
blabalalla bla bla
That type of thing.
Second off i like the piece because you simply said wat was on ya mind. With this i think you can focus just a little more attention to your vocabulary and your spelling and still keep your simple message there.
Finally...Keep It Comin..And Drop A Link Before THey CLose THis Joint
chuuch
Defyned
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Savior's Souljah
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II COR. 12:9
And He Said To Me, "My Grace Is Sufficient For You, For My Strength Is Made Perfect In Weakness." Therefore, I Will Rather Most Gladly Boast In My Infirmities, So That The Power Of God May Rest Upon Me.
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