This was feedback posted for MaRVJay1009
IP:
heres how i voted
kon - your structure was horrible. u had some decent wordplay. some lines didnt make sense. like this one:
Apoc tha 'dick gymnast' 'swinging from pricks' After my shit youll turn ‘forums into sex activities’ postin ya ‘fuck this thread’ fits //*
first off who is Apoc? secondly u got a star at the end like u supposed to explain..so with that said..u coulda easily copy and pasted this bar..
i really didnt like ur verse cause all of ur bars structures were different..the jew(you) lines are all played. the best line in ya verse was probly the 2nd bar cause it was the only real personal
Marv J - i enjoyed readin ya verse. great personal with that first bar. i think jus that bar killed his entire verse. the soccer game line had me laughing. you had more personals than kon. ur structure was better which made the flow more smooth.
with that said..Marv J wins this battle. but damn i can only leave feedback
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