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IP:
First Drop I've Seen From Either Of You...
Uuuum, I Dunno, It Wasnt Bad...
But You Didnt Really Define The Storyline Enough...
With This Sort Of Direct Invovlment Piece...
You've Gotta Include EVERY Detail...
I Mean, It Was Like, You're Both Going To Jail...
Then Randomly You're Trying To Start A War Between Gangs???...
I Was Kinda Lost...
But, The Imagery, Emotion And Flow Were All Sick...
You Just Left Out To Many Important Supports To The Story...
Keep At It Though...
If You Two Hone Your Shit You Could Do Alot Better...
Please Return The Favor On Me And Vango's New Drop...
Called "Hallow Tips Pt. 2":
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...ghlight=atticus
Thanks Alot Mayn, Stay Up...
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