Voted For: taz

Blah I'll break this down punch by punch and then show some categories.

This dude lost his peace no he is forever whack
Nigga comes up to me askin for his peaceback*

Ok nameplay, not a great punch or personal

I aint got shit fo ya except a L in ya column
Ill teach ya how to rap make sure u buy all my volumes

No/ self glor and filler.

You a newbie but aint new to me ill rip ya boy
Cats like you act a fool my bombs deployed

No creativity in wordplay sims or metas, no punch, self glor

Your a lyrical disaster nigga im ya master bow down
You a bow wow look a like beat me sike laugh out loud

Huh? Lol this is just confusing but ok punch i guess

Cant beat me unless you cheat you a biting addict
Rapped for a month beat a couple a chumps now u back at it

Would be a dece personal if u had proof

Well i caught onto your cheating now slow ya role
Take ya ass back to ya house of crack says stone cold**

I dont get it... stone cold?

Need to work on losing the self glor and adding more simlies and punching with every bar. Flow was decent.

Yo, you're just another victim by the name of Taz
I'm sending you to lyrical Alcatraz

^No, alcatraz is a prison. for criminals.

You spin around pretenging to be a tornado
I'll stomp you on the ground like a ripe tomato

No creativity. You're just stating facts that arent even personal

Squeeze your guts out make you bloody and Juicy
You're like Ricky ReTardo from I Love Lucy

.....Dope wordplay?

You're reduced to a storm but I'm the hurricane
while your boyfriends take turns on you running the train

what?

This battle will be unlike your last bout
Cuz this time YOU'RE gonna get technically knocked out

no... you're complimenting his last battle

Call your aunty and your uncle, nephews and nieces
Cuz I'l rip you a new ass and tear you to "peaces"

"doesnt mean its wordplay cause its in your name"

When I'm done, you'll be on a stretcher wishin
That I didn't just put you in the rap-Tazmission

nobody watches wrestling...

YOu're biggest mistake is my wrath you unleashed
Join the other losers cuz you've just been peaced

Hell no. Prewritten verse end, no punch at all.

You need extensive work on being creative with wordplay. You have a basic rap foundation with some ok vocab and good flow, work on your punchlines, they need to be witty and not just stating things. pz

v/ taz

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