wasn't bad enjoyed it but let me add something for real
hey peep mine at http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204308

Wear a dew rag thunder the skies got bags under my eyes
From lack of sleep and the facts deep now that I realize
I’m in love, look no such thing as too much bling
Jewelry brings fury to eyes, even make virgins sing
My rhymes giving nutrition because living conditions in
Some slum areas are bad, bazaar and sad just can’t grin