Aight...

Nice concept you used here, it was insightful and interesting to read for a change. The imagery was pretty good, you used clear pictures to express certain ideas. You had some grammatical errors in there that annoyed me but I'm just bitching lolz. The emotion was raw, portraying a global situation and giving enough details about it. The vocabulary was on point, a bit complexity might be added but overall there was a good balance between basic and complex. The entire piece had a poetic feel to it, the flow might be better though, some lines felt stretched, multis would've been a nice add-on.

Solid work fam

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