This was good.Flowed stayed constant for the most part.Some feedback here..is that you kept bringing up the pinkslip part too much.It Got repitative.I like the end

"Rapverse is sure to be mine Pen N’ Paper is my clone
Its the reason Members be sayin my name like Mike Jones"
^^This was nice right here.

The disses were harder than the other one..but it was still weak.But it was entertaining here.I was actually cruising when I read it all.That's hard to keep the reader in it when ya got a long OM.

My opinion..room for improvement..weak disses again..but entertaining.

Better than Leady's OM.