Dope. Theres not much wrong with it, and youve been told whats good about it so i wont waste time. It was ill.

This might be a bit hard to understand so bear with me... Cos I have to try to explain something wierd that could be said by just saying you need more change ups, but that wouldnt really help you. -_-

Basically, the only bad thing about it was your style. But don't take that personally .. Your style is good. The vocab, flow and general vibe of your style is good, BUT a style like yours needs a bit of character. That verse objectively was perfect, but subjectively it needs more. I think you know about this already though, if not conciously then unconciously, because about two thirds of the way through the vibe changed to more of a bliss n eso type thing...

you'll hear it from this magician, my vision changes wishes
you'll be asking for the music, instead of booze or stage bitches

^from that line is where that happened... Which was cool. You just need more... color... or something.

Its really hard to explain.... it needs more... personality..

I just read it again, and I really can't pinpoint what it is im talking about. Are you ever gonna do audio? Cos emotion in your voice would really make a piece like this dope.

But yeah... it needs more soul or something really hard to explain.

Dont worry too much about it, because half the time im an idiot and it probably doesnt even matter... just keep practicing and it will make it better.

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