Originally Posted by ~Lady Fiya~

Lyrics....
Right off the bat, you are way too basic lyrically. stop/hot , giving/live in, close/go... Throw those out the window every 'Cat in the Hat' rhyme get rid of, burn and quick. I know it helps when hitting a snare, but you have to challenge yourself and you don't always have to hit the snare (but that doesn't concern you so we'll leave that alone here).

Voice/Presence...
Your voice is could appeal to young girls. Your presence is there. You don't just let your voice out, and you come off as very technical which leads me to delivery.

Emotion/Delivery...
You have this "hop then skip" type delivery. It's very, very annoying. Extremely annoying. This exactly what you do: You pronounce the majority of the syllables for each bar and add breath in them and finish it off breathing out the last syllables of each bar holdin the final syllable too long. Which makes it seem like you tryna ride the beat but you failed.

Flow...
You take the simple way out with your flow. Meaning you do what's predicted for the beat. You would need to switch it up in a song like this because you don't want to sound repetitive.




Lyrics...
Still basic. But not as horrible as the first track.

Voice/Presence...
You put some bass in your voice. It sounded fine at the start, but then it started sounding generic. I don't know if you were tryna match Triple N's tone from the first verse or what. But don't do that.

Emotion/Delivery...
It's that "hop then skip" delivery again. You really need to get outta that, asap.

Flow...
Simple again at the beginning you switched it up towards the end of your track. That is a good thing.




Lyrics...
Story-telling, which is different from the other tracks.. Basic. REALLY basic. Only 2 bars were unpredictable in the first verse. Every bar in the second verse were predictable except one where I couldn't make out what you said. Last verse you switched up your lyrics somewhat but towards the end the only words I heard was bitch, this, bitch, shit, bitch, bitch.. You use 'bitch' too much, it shouldn't be used as a rhyming word.

Voice/Presence...
You have the perfect voice for this track. Which disappoints me because your delivery is what's ruining it from being a hot track. There are a few parts where I hear you fade out in your verses.

Emotion/Delivery...
You haven't changed, but the "hop then skip" actually matches this beat... The only part I felt your Emotion was "You wack this SPuL bitch, talk that shit again.."

Flow...
Your flow is just like the other past songs.




Lyrics...
From the start, you on that basic stuff again.

Voice/Presence
You got the regular presence you normally do.

Emotion/Delivery...
You try to hard on this track to make someone believe you. That, I DON'T and doubt anyone else would. Your chorus emotion is extremely wrong. You sound like Jermaine Dupre... It's annoying tho. VERY ANNOYIN. You loosened up on the ''hop then skip'' thing. But you still have it there every now and then. But I'm glad you straying from it even a little bit.

Flow...
Decent. It's just like the other songs.


Lyrics...
This type of track is one you can get away with basic lyrics so this hit your field on the nail... but you shouldn't settle to this.

Voice/Presence
This is byfar the best song to match your voice. You could have little girls falling all over you with this one.

Emotion/Delivery...
You not dependin on the ''hop then skip'' thing, which is great. But you still holding the last syllables to your bars wayy too long. It sounds lame.

Flow...
Same as before.

You have a voice anybody could listen to. The thing that doesn't match up is your delivery and lyrics. You come off as a joke to people. You can't be taken serious due to those two. Your flow is pretty decent as is, you have the ability to switch it up when needed. What I recommend you work on first would be lyrics because your delivery follows up on that. You tend to let your delivery 'bounce' off your lyrics. Try a more complex rhyme scheme and then you can work on your delivery. Those two are most important when it comes to you, because you do have great potential.

*Special Note: Work on Solo Tracks more than collabs, why? Because you need to push yourself lyrically, every solo track should be an exercise for that.