typing as I listen: beats real cool and mellow. I personally don't liek beats quite this slow, something a FEW more BPM is as far as I'd like for something "slow" even.

The first verse is well, lays a foundation. Your clarity is very good. what hardare you usin?

Second verse was cool, not sure if this is the same character in the first verse, but it's a cool verse. if it is the same charcter, you gotta elaborate more on that so there's no doubt from a listener.

Third verse was a little flat IMO emotion wise and development wise. The last verse was the last intersting I guess, long story short. Overall for the song, it would have painted a more vivid transition of time if you made the fitst verse past tense liek he was, he did, etc, and the second verse present tense liek his is and now he's and so on and the last verse like he's going to and xyz is about to and such.

Your voice goes really well on slow and mellow tracks. Something in that voice sounds a little bit like cali to me, not sure whatit s.

I think the track's name shoulda been "on the inside looking out" because hell when you're in jail, that's wht it is exactly.

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