ok typing as I listen.......yea solid beat choice......the flow on first verse good.....your way of stroytelling is subpar....your imagery could be stronger....everyline seems like u jumping to a new scene instead of flowing into it.......the hook...aint bad....its more how it was mixed that makes it ah'ight....but it was still missing a catchiness factor.......now second verse u lose it......the story's developing gets weaker.....it seems like the story peaks in those first few bars of 2nd verse where u describing the gunshots.....3rd verse the delivery seems a lil forced early on an then it tapers off towards end......again the story had holes in its development on this verse......you gotta be more descriptive.....flow was repetitive throughout...you coulda change dit up alot more it woulda made this alot stronger...however it was a good listen.....keep doing ya thing u def handling ya biz....stay up........1

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