You need to elevate a lot on your poetry. There wasn't much about this that stood out, Your imagery was lacking, metaphors were lacking, message was alright but the substance that you tried to convey the message with was lacking...Over all, you just need a lot of work on your descriptive imagery, and metaphors. Once you figure those out...You'll be saying langston who's...

haha..get it...langston hughes.....alright..that was funny...

keep your head up

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