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Old 08-19-05, 02:38 AM   #7
Spektikul
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Dizzee -

Line 1: Didnt hit at all and wasnt used as a line to build up the 2nd one. Basically a pointless waste fa real.

Line 2: Just because you used the first 2 letters of his name, it doesnt make this line nameplay. I felt it was weak. If you were going to go this way at all you could have worded it a lot better.

Apostrophe -

Line 1: First line was pretty much weak. BUT, it did in fact build up your second one. You also used a little nameplay in both lines which I liked a lot better than just the first 2 letters of his name.

Line 2: Pretty funny shit, made me laugh. Didnt think you were going to go that way with the punch. At first I was kinda like blah, but after re-reading it I was like dope/funny shit son.

V/APOSTROPHE.........................