...This was pretty stupid. I mean, a shit load of it didn't even rhyme.

raw - nintendo 64
grin - ken
style - towell

you rhymed 'me' twice with no multi behind it.

Since when does hitting someone with a gun make them learn chinese? That shit doesn't make sense. Out of 8 lines in the beginning, 2 of them rhymed. Your punches were weak, your wordplay sucked, the game console/played thing is really played... not too good.