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Natural Killa
hmm well i thought you had a good flow and stucture, but something that wasn't there really was emotion ya know you need to show it more so then i can know when to pause i did see it but it was the fact that you didn't show it with a cama, well your imagery was very great probably the best thing about your piece but you need to up vocabulary make it more interesting ya know, give it some deph to your story ya know, anyway not bad pretty good man i didnt know you woulda been this good at topicals.

@. fuck you for usin them pics all the time but it makes you wanna read it more lol, anyway good stucture your gettin better man i can see it, flow was good and your imagery has always been good but i was really feelin it here probably the best thing about yours, nice emotion maybe you coulda showed it better like what i said to natural killa, but something i'd like to see you work on is multiples work on thoughs alright man, but you get my vote. 1

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