Voted For: Verbal Shoota

Murkage
well your not much of a text head i can see, your stucture was horrible, flow was horrible, your punchlines weren't quite hittin i didnt even see much creativty at all man, work on metaphors, work on usin simile's to introduce the punch then use the meta same goes for you verbal, but anyway i just didnt see that creativty in your lines plus why explain your punches who cares.

verbal
well you had a better flow and stucture thats fa sho, you had some creativty but you have everything backwards almost, you should be usin similes on the first line of your bar, then try n use a meta without a simile, actually usin the simile makes it not a meta anyway, just a little advice man, anyway you had better creativty to me so i give you my vote.
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