Alrighty...

Sweetie, do me a favor and write a bit more next time! I was dieing to read even more details and such so that's probably the only bad comment I can give. The concept was nicely though of and you worked it out in your own way. It wasn't really an imagery piece but yet you managed to use some images to express what you were saying. The emotion was serene yet very powerful at the same time. The vocabulary was on point: good balance between basic and complex and the flow was solid.

I began to feel my life cascade like sand in an hour glass
^I was really feeling this line...

Keep it up!

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