Voted For: Yvonne
Yvonne's at a fork in the road, which way will she choose?
i'd say she'd go right........but she went left just to loose
^^just to loose?..i think you mean lose..n this choppy rhymin here...2/10
i guess you would get a vote.....if the system ever won
but it's wins stuck at 0 sort of like elevationg from Yvonne(Y-Von)
^^Nameplay was ite..but in the set-up...system lines are played as fuck...4/10
she's from her crib, is that next to a bench and her guitar
i mean come on, your verse described just how whack you are
^^^set-it up ite...but punch sucked...3/10
your tung tied, with no spits, i guess she chocked and froze
sorry to break the news..but it's the opposite of dope you compose
^^Basic...2/10
Ite...this was a so-so verse.Had some choopy rhyming in the 1st bar.Basic rhyme scheme.Some lines like the 2nd bar..you had an ite punch..but set-up was bad.GEt more creative...Sytem lines have been done a million times before.So work on rhymin,set-ups,n creativity.
u wudnt be hotter dan a hoe cake even if u were from d oven
bitch,if u dot wanna Tripple like N count ur steps b4 u stolen
^^Poor rhyming..oven/stolen?..no...4/10
my punches make a hole between ur legs to make ut tigh dangle
watch him moan like triny when i knock him off 2 d state of mental
^^moan like triny?..do u mean trini?I'm from trinidad?..what's dat mean?..n in set-up..ut??..spell check your verses next time....3/10
babies break thru ya ego and make u re-arrange yr shit
its sad u think to be a hero when u just a genuine bitch
^^too basic...4/10
listen,even if you called urself god u still wunt get respect
cos nobody herre 2 act dramas,its all about lyrical effect
^^1st line is played as fuck..2nd was too basic..3/10
OK..Like Robert..you had an opener with choppy rhyming.That 2nd bar just seemed to make no sense.May e you had sumtin...but the spelling really messed it up.And once again..like Robert...you were basic n had played lines..like that God one.So work on the same thing that I told Robert to work on
WEAK BATTLE
Vote-Ynovne
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