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IP:
Voted For: -UNF-
Leavin You Torched-And-Finished, Scorched, With Your Corpse-Diminished
I Can Only Afford-A-Minute, So Im Gonna Kill You From The Start, Like Abortion-Clinics
—decent opener
"MaRVJay" is a gimmick...This Faggot needs to just leave and let me just win it
Just Admit It My Flow's Just Infinite, You Told Me To "Set and Spit"
—not really a punch here
So I'm "Rippin This Cunt", I Can Tell-That-Ya-Sunk
Fuck It, Im Expellin-This-Punk! Cause Ya Lips Bring In More Nuts Than An Elephants-Trunk
--almost
Light Ya Up Like A Blunt, I'll Stunt On This Runt, Open You Up Like A Present With My Lyrical Presence
Cause Facin Me's Like Dieing In Jail, Your Dead Before The End Of Your Sentence
—aight
Slaughtering Peasents, Ya Rhymes Aint Worth A Pot To-Piss-In, You Try-To-Glisten But No One Wants-To-Listen
Have You Spittin And Missin, Throwin Lines Aimlessly At Me Like Youre Stevie Wonder-Fishing
—not feelin this punch here
So Maybe after this battle MaRVJay will have learned
Cause all I did was cough on em and he had 3rd degree burns
—weak closer
i aint gota get real lyrical 2 get at u,14 wins off mc's dat pitful.
no girl a have sex with u..guess datz y ya name was a un-fuck-witabul.
—good use on his name
every mc in trigga town is a clown! & u mad cuzz im destine 4 more shyne.
and u just a "aol traveler" datz gon see "america-online"
—meh, don’t like this punch here
how mc's like u brag?,nah i dont need a beat da write 2 fag.
neva get famous u couldn't "head-lines" if u were a "tight durag".
—almost..
hi hater!...nah fam u not on my level so dont think i hate ya.
but da only time "pussy a have a buzz" its gon be a "vibrator".
—nope
i mean dis nigga im da meanest.......and your just a penis.
put ya "brain on ya pants" so u can really be a "JEaN-iUS".
—what? nah.. not likin this line
Overall
Marv.. decent structure here.. the flow was aight.. had at least
one personal in there.. and the punches were there except some
of them were weak.. but overall u came aight here.. but not hard
enuff
UNF.. ur structure needs help here.. and don’t use the “.....” shits
that’s one of the things make ur structure all over the place n’ shit
but anyway.. hardly saw personas in there.. and the punches need
a little improving here.. but overall u took this one a little bit tho
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no hate..
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..The Council..
7 Day Theory
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