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Old 08-20-05, 09:59 PM   #11
~Lady Fiya~
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Verse

Lyrics…
Your lyrics are what I’m not too fond of… at least for the first verse. The second verse you stepped it up. Add a few complex multis.

Voice/Presence
Your voice sounds good over this. I love your energy. Your presence is great. You sound like you do live performances or used to spitting on the mic.

Emotion/Delivery…
You have a really good delivery. I have nothing to say about it. It’s pretty damn good.

Flow…
Your flow is fine. Work on clarity a little bit. For the majority, you clear.. Some parts I’m like >>

Overall

You don’t have much to worry about but your lyrics. I’d say just up your lyrics some, especially the first verse… and switch up your rhyme scheme a little. Other than that, I wouldn’t recommend you change anything else.
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