Originally Posted by ~Lady Fiya~

Lyrics....
"how you doubt that i'm spittin the heat
when i can get a standing ovation from Christopher Reeves.."
You don't have super-dictionary words which I'm glad. You have pretty good lyrics. I'm feeling the metaphors. You even tried to pull out some multis, nice shit. And inner rhymes are present, good combination. I'm feelin’ you lyrically.

Voice/Presence...
You started off like you were gonna murder the track with your voice.. But you tend to go in and out on this one. So work on your presence a little. And your quality is not so hot just decent. You sound good over this beat, great choice.

Emotion/Delivery...
The chorus had the best emotion outta this track. Which is good, BUT you have to have a good distribution between the verses as well. Seems like you had the last verse down well. You gotta have the others just as dramatic. You need dubs for this…

Flow...
Your flow is pretty straight. Only a few times you fell off... those were the times your voice faded out. Memorize your verses. I believe if you were to record this again right now. You'd prolly have a better outcome than your original recording.




Lyrics....
This type of track where you could get away with ‘Dr. Seuss lyrics’. You had some multis here and there which was nice.. But don’t sacrifice your flow by tryna fit in too many multis. Multis are supposed to make your flow more smooth, NOT the other way around. If something don’t sound right off the bat, then reword it or replace it with something that sounds better when you say it out loud. Also, the intro… after you say “This is Dedicated to …. My future wife, I love you” stop talkin.. Let the beat play into your first verse… you can keep the “yo” right before.. But everything in between, drop it out.

Voice/Presence...
You have a better presence in this song then the previous one. You really need to fix your quality. It’s really bothering my ears. You might be too close to the mic.

Emotion/Delivery...
I seen that you were really feeling this track. You put your heart in this track. Start recording dubs… it will make you should better, especially since you have multis present… it will sound great.

Flow...
You flow was off on this track. You attempted to slow down the first few bars of the first verse, but you ended up speeding up the rest of the way to hit the snares. DON’T do that. IF you gonna slow down do it smoothly, then if you do want to transition back to rapping fast then speed up gradually.




Lyrics....
Good lyrics. Story-telling. You have an effective hook, very catchy. There are a few spots where you rushed so fast that I missed what you said, you still continue to manipulate multis and pick some wise inner rhymes, you went creative and that‘s what people like to hear… “didn’t have remorse when his mother couldn’t use a rubber.. And didn’t choose to have an abortion..’’

Voice/Presence...
Your voice sounds really smooth on this track. You sound like WhiteBoi from Chicago. You got that mad-serious, gangsta commercial voice..

Emotion/Delivery...
Emotion is amazing on this track. This is what people would love to hear. You putting your all into it. Your adlibs are wayyyyyy better than the last two tracks. Try to record your dubs to match your main verse a little better. Cuz they are off on a few spots.

Flow...
Your flow is great. You have a few lines where you rushed, but all in all.. You controlling the flow of the beat instead of letting the beat control your flow. Good job.

**This is a track I would look forward to hearing on the radio. You shocked me with this one. You just have to polish this up some.




Lyrics....
Not as good as your previous one.. But pretty decent. You have a great imagery in your track. 3rd verse happened to be my favorite lyrically.. You went from aight, better, to way better from verse 1-3.. I’m feeling the words your said. Rhyme scheme is unique…

Voice/Presence...
Presence is getting better every track. Glad to see that happening.. One thing you should work on with this track; however, is clarity..

Emotion/Delivery...
Pretty good.. Similar to the last track. Put some dubs in here! This is the “This is Me” track for you.

Flow...
Your flow is prolly the best on this track than any other track. You tend to rush a little on some lines, but they actually follow up with the beat most the time.


From the first track, “Can’t Touch This” all the way to “If Life’s a Song” I seen large amounts of elevating in your mic presence as well as your delivery. You need to polish up your flow, and concentrate on clarity. Especially for parts where you rap faster than others. But you really winning me over with your style and your lyrical content is just fine as is. I look forward to seeing you working on those things. ADD DUBS!<<I stress that and couldn’t stress it more. You are on the level of some “vets” on this site, you just don’t have your stuff polished the way it should.. Your quality is getting better each track as well, I must add. I’m looking forward to seeing you work on these things and become one of the best audio heads. Keep pushing yourself.