Nice Poetry by both of you i thought dramas was deep and liked the emotion it dont rhyme all the time but thats not the idea of poetry i dont think...lol erm i think you started betta at the beggining and went off a bit at the end the beggining ...
Candles faintly flickering across the room
Red roses in bloom releasing their scent
As time went by beauty I could not deny
Luscious lips tremble over his dark skin
As million butterflies are fluttering within
Slowly sending shivers down my spine
By kindly kissing along my facial line
Such sensual shadows become one
Yet we have ended before we begun
Ferociously taken away from me
Locked up before we were free
Made by matters of the heart
But treacherously torn apart

....seemed to be deeper than the end very good emotion in here
overall 25/30

Lyricle Soljah

Yours seemed to be more ghettoey rofl ...good emotion good imagery made me think but i think you need to work on making the content stronger than it is but good verse liked this part the best

Heart of gold eyes of diamonds,
Never told she couldent succeed,
Never been big on drink and weed,
Only does what she needs,
Love in her mind is alwase there,
From a guy with long hair,
To the Husky with a stare,
Her life has been long 23 years,
On the wake up cryed many tears,
Since the stick up getting out is a fear,
Capital Fraud was waht she was taught,
Did multiple Jobs before she got caught,

dont ask me why i jus liked it seemed to be the strongest part to me good emotion

overall 23/30

close battle but i would say this goes to drama queen

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