Good verse, the emotion was good. You made all your lines rhyme and flow well, which made it interesting and good to read.

...My Mind Projects Images Of Those Who Shall Feel The Slaughter Next
Grasp Ya Lungs N Stop Ya Breath...Yu Rest Until The Next Day An Alter Boy Smells Rottin Flesh...

Thought that line was the best, it showed good emotion and created a good image.

Overall, it was good.