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Old 08-22-05, 10:29 AM   #31
veyetal
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Voted For: Mel Tingpoint

I'll put it like this u never had it, so put away the gimmicks
taz elevating.......... nah! the sky's past your limit
This text shit ain't for you, but I'ma still get down to biz yo
Punches will cause this faggot to subside................
.......................................... he'll prolly go to Quiznos
Mel is past average and better than you, taz eluding the clues
Man you gotta dress to kill................. I guess text ain' suited for you
These irritating heads, I'ma kill these fleas, while your skill is seized
Beat the skin of ya bitch as....................
..................................taz still would'nt appeal to me

^word, solid wordplay, nothing too special, but funny.....last line, conecpt has been done before, but it was nicely flipped, you took this for sure

vs

Mel cant peep my sh*t dont swear he has virgin eyes*
After my 10 lines this cats L column will be devirginized

^and even that was weak/played, need stronger concepts man, think of wittier more creative punches, that verse was too basic......and IMO, you should not be winning

v/mel tingpot
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