Voted For: Natural killa

an ok battle,

tony green.....ok first off the topic was kind of gay, i don't know who picked it but it is too basic and easy to do. but anyway, tony had a nice approach to the topic, nothing overly creative, the flow through the piece was nice, but the structure was kind of text-like (if you get that). anyway, the imagery of the piece seemed kind of 2-dimensional to me, it had picture to it so the reader can see what you are writing about and picture it, but for me it lacked emotion. the vocabs were ok, pretty basic though and you cud use to get more complex with that shit. overall i wud say 6/10

killa......had a more topical style to it, props on that considering you aint a topical writer, the structure was cool and the flow was nice.....u also had a decent approach to the topic but you cud've come a little more creative, the vocabs in ure piece were consistently basic after the first few bars, i thought you started well but fell off. and overall your piece lacked real emotion and imagery much like tony's....when it comes down to it both pieces were a little to 2-dimensional and basic to have any real impact. but kill, overall 6.5/10


the reason i give the win to killa is becuz both pieces as i said lacked in the same kind of things, but the one thing about tony's that threw me off is that its all gangsta talk and shit, and i get that it goes with the topic, but topicals are supposed to be about emotion and trying to draw a picture to the readers eyes, i felt that killa's piece did that more.

V/ - Natural killa

no hate at all.....

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